Cordell Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 This may not be the smartest thing I've done, but this is the best place I know of to get all kinds of opinions. So here is most of my resume, tell me what you think. Objective/Skills I wish to work for a company that will allow me to use all of my skills. Much of my career has been as an undercar technician, but is not limited to any one area of automotive service. Prior to starting my career as an Automotive technician I had worked as an Electrician, and became very proficient in circuitry, schematics, and wiring. Work History Monro Muffler Brake, E Livingston, Reynoldsburg Ohio Service Technician, Assistant Manager, August 2007 to October 2008 Tire Discounters, Goergesville Rd, Columbus Ohio Service Technician, January 2007 to August 2007 Sears Auto Center, Eastland Mall Columbus, Ohio Tech 2, Oct 2005 to January 2007 Columbus Dispatch Newspaper Delivery, May 2006 to June 2008 Just Dandy Electric (now defunct) Leadman Journyman Electrician May 2003-August 2005 Denier Electric 4000 Gantz Road Grove City, OH 43123 Commercial Electrician Oct 2002- May 2003 Miller/Romanoff Electric (reorganized into Romanoff group) Electrician May 1998- October 2002 Education/Certification ASE certified in brakes, steering/suspension, electrical Hunter alignment certified State (Ohio) Fire alarm licence Electrical Apprenticeship with the Associated Builders and Contractors Eastland Career Center, vocational training in Electrical Technology Reynoldsburg High School, Graduated Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wonderboy Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Looks pretty good to me. But, I dont really know what a resume should look like so I may not be much help. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brrcats Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 for your work history, describe your main responsibilities and anything that you accomplished there, obviously something worth note, not just the basic stuff. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cordell Posted November 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 for your work history, describe your main responsibilities and anything that you accomplished there, obviously something worth note, not just the basic stuff. I was trying to keep it one page. I like the idea, but wouldn't that make the resume kind of clutered or multiple pages? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
V8 Beast Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 1 constant is you want to give some type of insight into what you are doing/did at each job listed. I personally like the 1 page resume myself. When interviewing and seeing 3+ page resumes I look at the objective, the first job, and then just look at the time worked on each job. Depending on the job more than 1 page can do more harm than good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MrMeanGreen Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Quit referring to yourself in the first person. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MrMeanGreen Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Oh, and "criticize". Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MrMeanGreen Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 PM me your email, Scott, and I'll send you mine for comparison. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
87GT Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Your objective statement I guess is "Objective/Skills" area? I normally make 1 or 2 sentences at most at the top of mine. I always change it to explain something specific about the job I am applying for. Example: I want to extend my career path to X and eventually develop into management. You should put dates on your education section exactly like you did in work history section. Put references depending on the job you apply for. Just make sure the whole thing is 1 page. If more then 1 page then put "References available upon request". Also as a side conversation I worked at Miller Romanoff for a few months during your time there. I helped the network admin rewire and install the T1 and run phone lines for everyone in the office. Plus we pushed out software updates to each machine by hand. But this was all done starting at 5pm until 9-12am or so Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cordell Posted November 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Your objective statement I guess is "Objective/Skills" area? I normally make 1 or 2 sentences at most at the top of mine. I always change it to explain something specific about the job I am applying for. Example: I want to extend my career path to X and eventually develop into management. You should put dates on your education section exactly like you did in work history section. Put references depending on the job you apply for. Just make sure the whole thing is 1 page. If more then 1 page then put "References available upon request". Also as a side conversation I worked at Miller Romanoff for a few months during your time there. I helped the network admin rewire and install the T1 and run phone lines for everyone in the office. Plus we pushed out software updates to each machine by hand. But this was all done starting at 5pm until 9-12am or so Thanks for the tips. I would have been in the field doing commercial electrical install. I worked on stuff like Bg Bear, and Polaris mall. I pretty much was kept doing big power distribution while I was there. I was really good at big conduit, switchgear, and termination. Would I have ever run into you? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin R. Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Needs work man. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
87GT Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Thanks for the tips. I would have been in the field doing commercial electrical install. I worked on stuff like Bg Bear, and Polaris mall. I pretty much was kept doing big power distribution while I was there. I was really good at big conduit, switchgear, and termination. Would I have ever run into you? Probably not seeing as I was working in the building. The new location they have/had? that is. They offered me an electrician job but I never took it. It is good though because I have a better job now. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheHaze Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 I think you'd get more help if you showed the entire thing and in the format you're planning on using. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rally Pat Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 Quit referring to yourself in the first person. When writing out what your employment goal is, you are to refer to yourself in the first person. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brrcats Posted November 3, 2008 Report Share Posted November 3, 2008 I was trying to keep it one page. I like the idea, but wouldn't that make the resume kind of clutered or multiple pages? definitely keep it to one page. I've used this for my resumes, its basically one sentence. You have to really use that sentence though. With so many different jobs you may want to focus on the ones you worked at the longest, or the ones that you held authority positions or ones that you accomplished something more than what was expected. here is a copy of my resume I used to get my current job, you can see the pattern of the sentence structure of the experience section, the formatting is a little messed up though Objective I wish to utilize my knowledge base from the classroom in coordination with my varied expertise in the professional world to acquire a position in the field of chemical engineering. Experience Sept 2005-Present L’Oreal USA Piscataway, NJ Engineering Explorer - ISIS Worked as part of a multi-functional team responsible for evaluating the new manufacturing system, identifying gaps in current processes, and creating business rules and procedures for optimum performance Coordinated the cleansing and migration of data, training of personnel, and implementation of the SAP based ISIS system Redesigned warehouse and created solutions for supply issues resulting in increased efficiency, improved safety, and a headcount reduction of eight. Jan 2004-Sept 2004 Millennium Inorganic Chemicals Ashtabula, OH Process Engineering Co-op Led project to install two $60,000 submergible pumps to prevent harmful TiCl4 releases from storage tanks Provided engineering support for micronizer trial to improve pigment quality and reduce steam usage Developed emergency generator project to prevent environmental releases due to unplanned power outages Mar 2002-Sept 2003 Honda of America Mfg Marysville, OH Environmental Co-op Innovated RCRA spent solvent leak tracking and documentation system reducing man hours required from days to hours Analyzed spent purge composition data for use as alternative fuel source contributing to the companies green factory goals Developed company-wide SPCC tank integrity testing compliance schedule for oil containing tanks Evaluated the separation of heavy metals from wastewater and reduction of potable water usage Education Sept 2000-June 2005 University of Cincinnati Cincinnati, OH Bachelor of Science in Chemical Engineering - 3.07ChE GPA Vice President of American Institute of Chemical Engineers UC Chapter Secretary of the UC Engineering Tribunal Bow seat of the UC Heavyweight Varsity Men’s Rowing Team Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kirks5oh Posted November 4, 2008 Report Share Posted November 4, 2008 you don't mention anything in your objectives. be specific. "i want a job that will allow me to utilize all my skills", doesn't tell me shit. be specific as to what job you're looking for, because i have no idea based on your first sentence. are you looking for a job as an auto mechanic?? or are you interested in hanging out in the mens room smelling other peoples' shit??--i can't tell. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SinisterSS Posted November 4, 2008 Report Share Posted November 4, 2008 did you go to honda east and apply yet? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cordell Posted November 4, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 4, 2008 did you go to honda east and apply yet? meant to do it today, I'm trying to get my resume looking better. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
street pilot Posted November 4, 2008 Report Share Posted November 4, 2008 Get some skills learned or responsibilities listed for each work reference. Purge any work history that isnt relevant to the position you are applying for to keep it to 1pg. Any gaps can be discussed in the interview. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MrMeanGreen Posted November 4, 2008 Report Share Posted November 4, 2008 Do not leave gaps if at all possible. The one page deal also doesn't always apply. Remember, you have twenty initial seconds for them to want detail afterwards. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin R. Posted November 4, 2008 Report Share Posted November 4, 2008 needs adjectives Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cordell Posted November 4, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 4, 2008 Do not leave gaps if at all possible. The one page deal also doesn't always apply. Remember, you have twenty initial seconds for them to want detail afterwards. I'm still working on it, I took a lot of ideas from the beginning of yours. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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