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Hey I just recently started a band. Our style of music: Metal. As our first song, I recorded the rythm guitar, bass guitar, and guitar solo on a track. I gave to to my drummer who made a part to it. Then name of the song is "Purge"...I just finished the lyrics, tell me ( honestly ) what you think of them. ( Note: The lyrics won't have the same effect minus the music )

 

PURGE

 

Verse 1:

Free from impurities

Washed my face

Few were true to me

Cage my disgrace

 

Pre-Chorus:

Sin!

Guilt!

Hate!

Rid yourself of...

 

Pain!

Dread!

Dirt!

Cleanse yourself of...

 

Cold!

Filth!

Black!

Clear yourself of...

 

Fire!

Rage!

Clouds!

Clean yourself of...

 

Rid yourself of...

Clear yourself of...

Cleanse yourself of...

 

Chorus:

 

Looking past my eyes

Part of my disguise

Through the darkened skies

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Must I feel this pain?

My efforts are in vain?

Can't see past this rain

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Peeling back the skin

Now I won't pretend

Of who I was back then

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Gotta clean away

Gotta scrub away

Gotta wash away

 

I gotta

I gotta

I gotta

I gotta purge

 

Verse two:

Loose your securities

Feel the urge

No more immunity

Get ready to purge

 

Pre-Chorus:

 

Sin!

Guilt!

Hate!

Rid yourself of...

 

Pain!

Dread!

Dirt!

Cleanse yourself of...

 

Cold!

Filth!

Black!

Clear yourself of...

 

Fire!

Rage!

Clouds!

Clean yourself of...

 

Rid yourself of...

Clear yourself of...

Cleanse yourself of...

 

Chorus:

 

Looking past my eyes

Part of my disguise

Through the darkened skies

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Must I feel this pain?

My efforts are in vain?

Can't see past this rain

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Peeling back the skin

Now I won't pretend

Of who I was back then

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Gotta clean away

Gotta scrub away

Gotta wash away

 

I gotta

I gotta

I gotta

I gotta purge

 

 

Interlude:

 

Purge

Oh Purge

It's on

It's on the verge

 

Solo:

 

Pre-chorus:

 

Sin!

Guilt!

Hate!

Rid yourself of...

 

Pain!

Dread!

Dirt!

Cleanse yourself of...

 

Cold!

Filth!

Black!

Clear yourself of...

 

Fire!

Rage!

Clouds!

Clean yourself of...

 

Rid yourself of...

Clear yourself of...

Cleanse yourself of...

 

Chorus:

 

Looking past my eyes

Part of my disguise

Through the darkened skies

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Must I feel this pain?

My efforts are in vain?

Can't see past this rain

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Peeling back the skin

Now I won't pretend

Of who I was back then

 

I gotta

I gotta

 

Gotta clean away

Gotta scrub away

Gotta wash away

 

I gotta

I gotta

I gotta

I gotta purge

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Guest nevarmore

Metalhead checking in. Not bad, but you better lay down some damn good music to back that up.

 

You aren't telling a story here, you are expressing emotion. The music needs to match it. You can make the lyrics be angry or sad depending on the speed and pitch.

 

What bands are you influenced by? I love smaller local bands. I hope you don't suck, post some clips of your stuff as soon as you have it.

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Guest FuelforFire

The bands that influenced me:

 

Megadeth:4%

Metallica:90%

Creed:4%

Limp Bizkit:2%

 

These are my FIRST set of lyrics....

 

Sounds like most of you don't like em :(

 

It is my first set, but I am proud of them. A lot of anger? Well, I have chronic depression, and I am angry all the time.....That, plus the fact that my main influence was Metallica...yu can figure the rest

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Guest mudbutt
Originally posted by StreetlightJr:

Why are there so many words when we won't be able to understand them anyway? I Don't mean to be a cock, but * > Metal

*> You're weak input on EVERY topic ;)
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Guest stevil
Looks good to me. graemlins/thumb.gif And I agree, with metal it's mostly the music... your lyrics could actually be about making peanut butter and jelly sandwiches, but when you're belting it out nobody is gonna notice the content, as much as the emotion. I couldn't tell you actual lyrics to most of my favorite songs, hehe. :D
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Oh yeah, we still need a name for our band....To me, picking a name is the hardest part. Has to be something short, punctual, and cool sounding.

 

My lead guitarist was like: "Sons of a utopian hatred" That got shot down fast.

 

I was thinking like...

Rival

Ominous

Preserving freedom

Ritual

 

and a few others....

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Guest FuelforFire
I haven't posted music because it's not finally recorded....I write the rhythm guitar, bass, and vocals plus a solo at my house, then I give the tape to my drummer and he figures out what he can do with it.
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Guest Rane
If anyone likes rap and wants to hear some fucked up mp3's of me rapping that I recorded into my computer on a random beat let me know :-p.
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